Wednesday, May 28, 2014

Ashikabi no Shinobi, Chapter 31

Ashikabi no Shinobi, Chapter 31, Q&A
5-digit: Since you asked I am going to tell you right now. If Naruto were to fight every Sekirei in the Sekirei Plan at the same time, including Miya and the other single digits, he would destroy them. Utterly. There is no one on this god given planet who could defeat Naruto now that he's getting serious. Period. Miya comes the closest, but she's only got the raw power (aka chakra reserves) of Uchiha Madara, and Naruto has long since surpassed Madara in both the amount of chakra he possesses and Ninjutsu at his disposal. This is actually why I focus on character development so much. There's simply no one in this story who can prove to be a challenge for him.
Guest: The amount of time that has passed is honestly insubstantial. It really doesn't matter, but if you're curious, about 7,000 or so years have passed since the Fourth Great Shinobi War. Every time I've mentioned a specific amount of time that has passed, I was alluding to something that happened X number of years ago, not the true amount of time that has passed.
The lemons will actually be starting really soon. After this next arc in fact.
Big reveal will be coming soon. That's all I can say.
And it will be revealed to everyone who has some place in Naruto's heart. That includes Uzume and Chiho.
NarutoDkurosaki: Naruto is acting different than he has in earlier chapters, but this should not really surprise you. One of the things I've done with Naruto's personality is made him a bundle of contradictions. In some ways, you could almost say Naruto has multiple personality disorder. The only difference is that he does not have multiple personalities, just conflicting desires that often cause him to frequently contradict himself. Eventually, Naruto's personality will become more stable.
1066wthec: That was not Kakashi. It was a clone of Naruto henged as Kakashi. Nothing more.
Milicent Bystander: While I get what you're saying, it's clear to me that you don't really understand what I'm trying to accomplish here. Naruto, the Naruto in this story, is someone who has tried to build a lasting peace like his late sensei would have wanted for THOUSANDS OF YEARS. Thousands, at the very least he tried to bring peace to the world for 5,000 years before giving up. I don't care who you are, there is only so much a person can take before they just give up and let cynicism and bitterness take control of their life. The fact that Naruto managed to hold out for FIVE THOUSAND YEARS is a miracle in and of itself. However, not even someone like Naruto can remain idiotically idealistic forever. There are only so many failures someone can deal with before they've given up, and Naruto reached his limit a long time ago.
And for your information, this story is about Naruto finding himself again. It's about him becoming the person he was back when the Elemental Nations still existed, or at least as close to that person as possible.
JaXX188: It's not so much that Naruto is like Kiritsugu Emiya so much as it is he just doesn't think about the lives he's taking. Do you think about the ants you step on when you walk? Of course not. To Naruto, most of humanity are like ants. He might help them if they catch his attention, but if he doesn't “see them” so to speak, then he's not gonna be concerned about the number of casualties his plan inflicts. It's sort of like an out of sight out of mind philosophy.

Riceb0x: The reason Naruto didn't Hiraishin Haruka and Kuno out is a two-fold reason. First, he was not about to give away one of his abilities to someone he didn't know and didn't trust. While he could very easily wipe the boy's memories, he simply felt this way was less of a hassle. The other reason is simple, and will actually be revealed in chapter 32.

Ashikabi no Shinobi, Chapter 30

Chapter 30

Nightwing: That's kind of the point. Miya's feelings are very complicated right now. You have to understand that she loves her husband very dearly even though he was not an Ashikabi. These feelings have carried over long after his death.
Now she is beginning to react to Naruto. I think I've made it obvious enough by now that I can just come out and tell you that. However, this is causing conflicting emotions for Miya. She loves her husband and doesn't wish to betray his memory by being with another man. At the same time, she is reacting to Naruto. Not only that, but she holds a deep respect for Naruto. She knows that he has suffered more loss and heartbreak than anyone else, enough that any normal person would have given up long ago. Yet even though he is essentially a broken human, he still has that inner strength that his canon side has always possessed, and it's what has always pushed him forward. She sees his inner struggle, his desire to keep his distance. Yet she can also see that he wants more than anything to surround himself with loved ones. This conflict he has makes her feel even closer to him, because she is having those same conflicting feelings right now, albeit, on a much smaller scale.
This is why I'm downplaying Miya's reaction to Naruto. Right now she is fighting her own desire to bond with him.
As to your other question, I don't really have a favorite character to write for. I like all of the characters I write. I don't think my story would be as good if I actually had a favorite.
Guest: Naruto will take the kids gloves off soon, though, it will likely be done in a way you don't expect.
Regfurby: I can see why you would feel Naruto's fluctuating personality is a cause for concern. Let me see if I can clear up the reason for his constant change of emotions.
Naruto is currently struggling against himself. A part of him wants nothing more than to leave all this behind, the Sekirei Plan, his Sekirei, the people he's met, everything. This part of him, the one you see most of the time but has been coming out more and more recently, is more or less a shield, a protective shell that he shows to the world so he can't be hurt by losing people he loves anymore. After all, if you can't get close to someone, it won't hurt you when they die.
On the other hand, that's not really who Naruto is. Naruto is the kind of person who cherishes his bonds. He wants more than anything to love and be loved. To have people he can protect and cherish and love. It is a fundamental part of his psyche that not even 6,000 years can take away. And yet it is this very part of him that has caused him so much pain over the years. How many people has he grown close to only to watch them die? How many women has he loved, only to be forced to sit there and watch on helplessly as they fade from his life? How much tragedy has seen? How many times was he forced to watch as his dreams of a peaceful world were burned to ash by the very humans he was trying to bring this peace about for? There is a reason he has avoided getting to close to people for a little over a thousand years, you know.
This is why is personality fluctuates so much. He currently has two, though in the beginning he had three. One is his true personality, the other is a shell, a mask that he presents to others in order to protect himself.
As to your other comment, no one is perfect. Naruto makes mistakes like everyone else.
Dragonblaze9173: Actually, if you go back to when Naruto and Matsu were talking before he met with Takami, you would know that Naruto is the one who presented Matsu with the information on the Sekirei Crests.
Wyverns: Would you think you're still human after upwards of 5,000 years of life? Naruto is immortal. He has lived far longer than any human has a right too, and he has more power than any human has ever dreamed of. How can he be human when he has so much power? When he has lived for so long? What's more, you have to understand that Naruto doesn't like humanity as a whole. He has seen the ugly side of humanity far too often for his liking, and it's given him a disgust for his own species. He doesn't want to associate himself with a race of beings that are perfectly willing to commit genocide, that use religion as an excuse for war, that are greedy and self-centered and perfectly willing to hurt others if it means getting what they want. It's hypocritical of him, but then, he is still human even if he doesn't want to admit it.
Velial Madness: Naruto's not angsty because he is immortal, but because his immortality has forced him to watch every person he has ever loved die. Its forced him to watch as his dreams of a peaceful world were spat on by those he was building this world for. How would you feel if you tried to bring peace to a world for over 5,000 years only to fail each and every time? How would you feel if you fell in love and started a family, only to watch as time and time again, the family you created, loved and cherished perished either by the trials of age or the flames of war, disease and famine? For someone like Naruto, who cherishes bonds more than anything else, immortality is the biggest curse you can wish upon him.
Joe Lawyer: Yes, he can use the Flying Thunder God. He just doesn't use it very often.

Guest: Wow! I'm surprised. You're complaining after reading 30 chapters of my story because it's not going the way you want it to! How about this. Why don't you write your own Naruto/Sekirei story and make it more popular than mine. After that, we'll talk.

Ashikabi no Shinobi, Chapter 29

Chapter 29
Arthain: Well, you do what you feel you have to. I'll be disappointed, of course, but if you don't feel you can ready my story anymore, then I don't want you forcing yourself to continue.
Grey vs Ale: I'm glad to know you like those moments. It's always very difficult to write for Akitsu because she is so dang silent, so I often have trouble writing her. Still, I think I did a pretty good job here.
Ryubimaru, dracopoet, AgelessWolf, lostsoldierS636: My original novel is called American Kitsune, A Fox's LoveI don't know when it will be out, but I am hoping before my birthday on March 19th.
Random Reviewer: I find it funny that you are saying something like "Teens from those places aren't the horribly socially inept otaku/john-every-man you see in like 99% of harem-comedy stories. Those countries tend to overly sexualize everything and teens from those places are a lot less likely to "freeze up" when a hot girl propositions them and a lot more likely to be doing it like rabbits the moment they realize the girl is willing to do it with them.
In short while it was written somewhat decently the concept falls flat. Or rather it's so over-done that even if the guy *was* one of those horribly socially inept otaku it *still* wouldn't be all that interesting to read about and it would be pretty much nothing more than a retread of every other harem-comedy written in that style." while reading a fanfiction about a harem-anime-crossover. The irony of your statement nearly made me cry from laughing so hard, especially because you've apparently read 29 chapters and over 400,000+ words of a harem fanfiction while telling me this.
Just so you know, if stories like mine were not popular, then those "99% of harem-comedy stories" would never get dubbed and sold in other languages. The fact that you have anime like Highschool DxD, Girls Bravo, Sekirei, Heavens Lost Property, Shuffle and Aesthetica of a Rogue Hero (just to name a few) tells me that a story like mine actually would be popular if I managed to reach the right target audience in mine. Namely, anyone who enjoys anime, manga and Japanese Pop Culture.
It also means that, though my story might not be the first of its kind, it's still unique simply because it's an American Novel that is basing its plot along the lines of a Japanese Light Novel.
Cyborg500: Well, I can't answer the question about Miya without spoiling the story, but I will tell you that lemons are coming soon. In fact, my first lemon will be right after this next arc.
NeroYagyuu: You have a very interesting idea. I can't say much, since I don't want to give too much away, but I can tell you that I have a plan for Minaka, and it's not dissimilar to what you've suggested, though, it's still very different.
Minstral Savant: Truth be told, I am not a fan of using Kusano as emotional blackmail either, but there really aren't that many ways to convince Naruto that he should help Haruka and Kuno. I'll admit that I am using Kusano as something of a Plot Device here, though, I think it was pretty well done because it's actually something she would do (if you watched the anime then you'll know that Kusano actually does the same thing to Tsukiumi when Minato agrees to help Haruka).
I do hope you'll forgive the blackmailing. It was not meant to come across as emotional blackmail, but simply Kusano reminding Naruto of who he once was; someone that was always willing to lend a hand to people in need.
Quelthias: I understand your concerns about this chapter. I imagine there were a few people who were not happy with my decision to have Naruto help Haruka and Kuno. I'll answer your questions in the order they were given:
1. No, they do not have papers, an identity, an alibi or anything else, but Naruto can get those for him. Don't forget, he has his own spy network and several thousand workers from various governments in his pocket.
2. The reason for that is a combination of things. The first is that Naruto is currently training himself, the second is something that I don't want to spoil, but will be revealed after the escape from Shinto Teito arc.
3. You want the truth? In all honesty, there is no strategic purpose for helping these two. He 'says' it's to test the abilities of his Sekirei, but the real reason is because he does not want to disappoint Akitsu, Kusano and Musubi... and Homura too, I guess. Notice how every time someone has come to him for help, or he has seen someone in need of help (Akitsu, Uzume and Chiho), he has rendered them aid. Despite his reluctance and desire to not get involved or help others, it is simply in Naruto's nature to help people.
If you want to learn more about Naruto's character, go to tvtropes.org and look up who wants to live forever?, refusal of the call and heroic neutral. These are just a few of the tropes that Naruto falls under.
Guest: You have obviously never read a light novel before. Just so you know, Japanese light novels are a lot like that. Point in fact, a good deal of the more recent popular anime that has come out like Highschool DxD and Aesthetic of a Rogue Hero, both of which are "generic harem anime #56" types, as you call them, started off as light novels.
And the only reason a story like mine is not professional quality is because I don't have a couple editors editing the crap out of my story. You think an author can write, edit and proofread their own work? You obviously know jack squat about the publishing business, my friend. Not that I blame you for this. I've done a lot of research into publishing. Also, my story is based on Japanese Pop Culture, so the 'ufufufu' is actually there for a reason.

narutoDkurosaki: You are mistaking a trope for a cliche. Just so you know, tropes and cliche's are not the same thing. To quote tvtropes "Tropes are devices and conventions that a writer can reasonably rely on as being present in the audience members' minds and expectations. On the whole, tropes are not clichés. The word clichéd means "stereotyped and trite." In other words, dull and uninteresting." meaning that so long as the story is interesting, engaging and brings something new to the table, it is not cliched.

Ashikabi no Shinobi, Chapter 28

Chaper 28
So, this won't be so much a Q&A as it will be me just making some general comments. There were not a lot of people who actually asked a specific question this time, making a Q&A a tad difficult.
To start, a good number of people have mentioned how cold Naruto was towards Haruka. One of the things that I've made a point of inferring in my story is that Naruto is not only fairly cynical when it comes to life and humanity in general, but he's also pretty apathetic towards their plight. He has made it a point to involve himself with humanity as little as possible and goes out of his way to avoid any kind of human contact that does not involve one night stands. This means he really doesn't care about Haruka or his plight enough to help him.
Another factor you must look at is that Naruto decided in a previous chapter to be a good Ashikabi. In his mind, an Ashikabi is sort of like a Hokage in that they look after those who are under them. In this case, Kusano, Homura, Matsu, Musubu and Tsukiumi are his Sekirei, the ones he is tasked with looking after and caring for. Haruka and Kuno are not his Sekirei, therefore he has no obligation to help them.
What's more, Naruto has very little in the way of morals, so he isn't just going to help someone because it's 'the right thing to do'. He doesn't care about doing the right thing. Right and wrong no longer hold any meaning for him.
The truth of the matter is Naruto could help them escape. Hell, he could defeat the entire Disciplinary Squad on his own. He just doesn't want to because he doesn't care. It doesn't matter to him if Haruka and Kuno are forced to fight in the Sekirei Plan or if one of them are killed. They mean nothing to him. Why should he go out of his way to help two people who he feels absolutely nothing for?
Someone also mentioned Uzume and how Naruto helped her. I would like to state that Naruto also knows Uzume on a more personal level. He also benefited from helping her: he learned more about Higa, who had already tried subverting him to his cause. He had taken away one of Higa's pawns (Uzume), weakening his position and ability to operate covertly. And he had taken several of Higa's Sekirei out of the game. If he helped Haruka, he might be able to defeat the Disciplinary Squad, but that might not benefit him because he has no way of predicting what Minaka will do in the event of their defeat.
Now this is an answer to a direct question. DarkPirateKing69 asked me about my A/N where I mentioned that this was not all I had originally intended to write for this chapter. What I meant when I said 'this chapter was going to be longer' was that I had originally planned on writing more, but because I had already gone over 2 weeks without updating and couldn't think of how to write the rest of this chapter, decided to end it there and write the rest later on when I have a better idea of how I want to write the rest.
Lastly, some people have mentioned on this blog that they feel I have given up on a story because it hasn't been update in months.
To start, the only story that has not been updated in months, and please note the plural, is Birth of the New Demon King. The others have all been updated within or near the last two months, with Shifts in Life being the one that has gone the longest without an update. Considering there are fanfic authors out there who will not even update one story for 2-12 months, I like to think I have a pretty decent update time. It's also only been recently that I have stopped updating stories once a week, and that is simply due to a combination of me trying to find a new job and focusing on my original story, which I want to get published soon.
And while it is true that Harry Potter has been updated more than any other, that is simply because I have more ideas for Harry Potter than I do any other story. I can only write what my muse tells me to write. If you force yourself to write for a story, the chapter written will turn out horribly.
You can't force these things. Writing is as much of an artform as painting is; it requires patience, motivation and a clear image of what you want to write in your mind. If you don't have these things, you won't write a good story.
I want it known now that none of my stories are being abandoned. If they were, I would have posted an A/N saying that the story is being abandoned, much like Gavedin did with many of his recently. As I have not, you can take that to mean all of my stories are still going to be continued.

On a side note, I am thinking of updating either Shifts in Life or Gaia's Sennin. I have not decided yet.

Ashikabi no Shinobi, Chapter 27

Chapter 27
SkyCaptain502: First of all, you obviously don't know squat about Sekirei if you're saying... erm... writing something like that. Whenever the Ashikabi of a Sekirei dies, the Sekirei dies with them. That's common knowledge that was given to us near the beginning of both the manga and the anime. Secondly, Miya's husband, Asama Takehito, was NOT an Ashikabi. He did not have the genetics capable of winging a Sekirei (we learned this in some of the more recent chapters). Therefore, Miya was NEVER winged, which is the reason she did not shut down when Takehito died.
narutoDKurosaki: Actually, Musubi is simply naive, not dumb. Canon Naruto on the other hand, is one of the stupidest characters in a Shounen Jump manga. Only Monkey D. Luffy and Son Goku reach his level of dumb, and those two are at least strong enough where their stupidity doesn't matter.
Arthain: I think the main reason for those differences is Naruto's immortality. In your story, Naruto just finished having a war that took almost everything from him. Naturally, he's going to hold everything that much closer to his heart. My Naruto is jaded by thousands of years worth of failures and watching loved ones die over and over again throughout the ages. He's trying to keep himself from getting too attached but failing epicly because that's not the kind of person he is at heart.
As for a chapter with substance. I've got one more 'build up' chapter, as it were, and then it's going to be a more substancy arc.

There weren't that many questions or comments that I could answer or respond to today. I think that's because these passed few chapters are basically build up chapters before I the next arc.

Ashikabi no Shinobi, Chapter 26

Chapter 26
Before I begin the Question and Answer, I would like to say something, metaphorically speaking because I'm not actually talking, I'm writing. Anyways, first, while I do appreciate the support you guys have given me when mentioning how you like my work as opposed to Arthain's The Ninth Sekirei Pillar, I don't want you guys bashing his work because of something I said. What I wrote in my little anecdote at the end was purely my own thoughts and feelings. I've read his story and honestly believe it is better than my own. I won't go into details, since I would have to spend several thousand words to do so, but this was simply my own belief that his story is better and more original than what I have, since my story is essentially a godlike Naruto being copy and pasted in Minato Sahashi's place.
I also found it kind of amusing when people mentioned how Arthain's Naruto was more of a Gary stu than mine. I am going to be honest here. The Naruto in my story is for all intents and purposes a God, and not like Pein's 'I am god' spiel, but an actual God. I'll reveal more later on, but suffice to say my Naruto is so far above everyone else in this story that if he were to get directly involved in the Sekirei Plan, he would stomp a mud hole in everyone's ass and leave them a broken mess of flesh and blood that could hardly be considered human.
Why do you think I haven't had him get involved in much of the fighting aside from the beginning where his body is out of shape from disuse?
Now, onto the Q&A!
A Simple Fool: I think you are forgetting something when I mentioned that Naruto has created harems in the past. He did not become a cold and heartless bastard right after the Fourth Great Shinobi War. I mentioned before that he had wandered the world trying to bring about peace for several thousand years BEFORE he gave up and became an empty shell of a person. In fact, he has only been an emotionless husk incapable of truly feeling human emotions for the past 1,600 years or so. That leaves around 4,000 or so years where he was NOT an emotionless human being. If you think along those lines, Naruto could have very easily created several harems in his lifetime.
As for the three goddesses, I actually plan on giving him a history with them. I won't reveal much because I don't like spoilers, but I will tell you they are not actually goddesses.
There is also another reason I brought this up, but I'm going to leave it to you guys to figure out why. It wouldn't be fair if I just gave you all the answers. Ufufufu.
shuriken200: Yes and yes. There will be a sex scenes, multiple, but not for a while, and yes, there will be a big reveal about Naruto's immortality. I won't tell you when or how, but it should be obvious that there will eventually be one since his immortality is a driving point for my story.
Arthain: No, I definitely meant fleas. Damn bugs are annoying, but warm. Kidding. Anyways, I thought about revealing Naruto's history here, or at least a bit of it, but it didn't really feel right. One thing you must know about Naruto is that he's stubborn. Canon Naruto is ridiculously stubborn and my Naruto has a couple thousand years to be set in his ways. His stubbornness knows no bounds. He's not going to just cave and tell Miya something because she wants to know. This secret has been one he's kept for a long time, so long that the act of keeping it a secret is pretty much an ingrained habit, and there are actually a number of reasons for that, which will be revealed in time. Suffice to say, there will eventually be this big reveal where everyone learns that Naruto is immortal, but it won't be for a while.
Casard: You're surprisingly polite for someone who says they're very blunt. Lol. Honestly, don't worry about whether you sound blunt or not. If I can take people flaming my work, then I can easily accept your constructive review and use it to better my writing.
As to things you feel should have been mentioned, I actually have a few reasons for not revealing. To the first, the answer is rather easy.
Tsukiumi has not said anything about the giant head cleaver people call a sword because she was honestly just too preoccupied by everything that happened to focus on it. She was chased all across Shinto Teito, captured, rescued by the person who is destined to be her Ashikabi, accidentally 'kills' her Ashikabi, watches him 'rise up from the grave' so to speak and then level fives one of the Sekirei chasing her, followed by her passing out from exhaustion after deciding to let him wing her and finally gaining her wings upon waking up. The fact that he was wielding a large ass sword was simply not on her mind at the time, and by the time she came to, the sword was pretty much forgotten. I believe the term overwhelmed fits her feelings here perfectly.
Matsu's reason is even easier to answer. She saw how Naruto reacted when Miya spied on him and she knows how zealously he keeps his secrets. She's not going to mention anything about his weapons or his fight with Mutsu, nor is she going to mention it unless he talks first.
Miya's sort of in the same boat as Matsu. Having already been on the receiving end of his anger, she's not going to push him. She may try to gently coax the answers out of him, but if he doesn't want to talk about something, she's not going to try and force him to.
Now your second issue, the one with the 'dark silhouette'. Naruto actually does know about it. I'm simply not revealing it until I feel the time is right. Don't worry, when I reveal it, you'll know what it is and why I kept it a secret until then.
Tying your third issue and the last one together, I will let you know what happened to Kurama when I give the big reveal on Naruto's past. Eventually, you will learn everything that happened in the Fourth Great War. How Naruto gained his immortality, whether or not Kurama is still a part of Naruto, all will be revealed in time. I can't say how many chapters it will be until then, because I honestly don't know. There is a very specific arc that needs to happen before I have Naruto reveal his past to the members of Maison Izumo, and I don't know how many chapters that will be.
Finally, Kazehana will play an important roll in the story. I won't be giving any spoilers, but I will tell you that much.
Concluding Statements:
A lot of people have noticed that I changed my name from Pokemaster12 to The Engulfing Silence. I have received upwards of 32 PMs asking me about this, so I decided that rather than answer each PM individually, I would answer them all here.
Yes, I did change my name. The reason for this was actually very simple. I felt it was time for a change, as I have never written a Pokemon story before.
When I first made this profile, I was in the Pokemon phase where I still enjoyed playing the gameboy Pokemon games and actually watched the anime and read the manga. That was why I picked the name in the first place.

I have not read or watched or played Pokemon for 4 years now. There was really no reason for me to be Pokemaster12 when I don't have much to do with Pokemon these days.

Ashikabi no Shinobi, Chapter 25

Chapter 25
ShadowStar91: Yes, Minato will play a roll in this story just like Yukari. It won't be a very big roll, but there will be a roll for him to play nonetheless.
kleshchevand: Honestly, I don't know how old Chiho is, but I do know that the legal age for consent in Japan is 13. That means if you are 13 years old, you are legally able to have sex without worry about being arrested or something.
marcusrose: Yes, Naruto has been a father. I've actually alluded to this several times without really mentioning it. Don't know if you can figure out how, but anyone who does will get a cyber cookie!
My own Thoughts on Ashikabi no Shinobi:
Not many people had any real long questions for me to answer, so I figured I would talk more about my experiences with writing.
Ashikabi no Shinobi is definitely one of the more interesting stories for me to write. This is due, in large part, to just how many characters I contain in any given seen. Sometimes I'll only have one or two, but there are many other times where my story will have six, seven, eight, or even nine people all together, all talking at the same time. It can get very confusing to write more than one conversation at the same time because you need to space both conversations out between each other without confusing your readers.
I think this is why most people stick with only having a few characters that matter in any given scene. Oh sure, they might have eight or nine people within a scene, maybe even more, but only two or three will actually have any importance to the dialogue.
Of course, that just makes me see this story as an intellectual exercise. It's a challenge to find the right combination between two or more conversations that are happening simultaneously.

And this isn't even going into how fricken difficult it is to write a story about a completely overpowered god-like Naruto's journey from cold, unfeeling bastard to a less naive version of who he used to be. That's even more difficult than engaging in several conversations at once in a single scene!