BlackAce5ds: Im pleased to see that Naruto's is powerful enough to beat the likes of Karasuba I was kinda worried about him being watered down to the point he couldnt beat the stronger and devastating sekrei, glad to see that wasn't the case. Well its been confirmed he has the rinnegan and probably the jubi as well
Answer: Not really a question, but I figured I'd comment. There are many things that you have to understand about Naruto's strength. First, while Naruto is not as strong as he once was due to hundreds of years of inactivity and not fighting strong opponents or keeping his skills sharp, he is still The Most Powerful Character in the Entire World, and yes, that is all capitalized. His fighting skills have dulled, but his power has not waned in the slightest. He has also started getting back into the swing of things. I showed in earlier chapters that Naruto has started training, and while I may not be showing that anymore, it's still happening, just off screen, so to speak. A good deal of Naruto's abilities, taijutsu in particular, have returned to a decent state. Right now I would say that he could easily beat someone like Maito Gai in straight up taijutsu.
zod6006: Hey, I have always liked your story ever since the 1st chapter. However I have noticed that lately you are being TOO descriptive and end up writing too much which makes it boring to read. I end up skipping through paragraphs. Its like when fillers are added in an anime in order to make the story longer by adding irrelevant stuff to it. You take too long to make a big change, for example: chapters 28-30 are generally the same.
Answer: That's more of a personal problem that you have. My writing style has always been descriptive, and I'm not nearly as bad as some people are (cough George RR Martin cough). You also have to understand that a lot of my story focuses on character development, in particular, the development of Naruto's character. I'm going to be honest with you. My story is about Naruto's development as a person. The climax of my story, will be when Naruto's development comes to an end. Its not about "Naruto gathering Sekirei and fighting MBI" or something like that. If he wanted, Naruto could crush MBI like a bug. They are nothing to him. His power is comparable to Kaguya Ootsasuki or whatever the name of the latest OPd villain that Kishimoto spit out of his ass. In fact, he's even stronger than she is. Hence, the reason you see all this filler, as you call, is because it's actually the story. Naruto gathering a harem and fighting MBI? That's filler.
Juoppo: So, Naruto cares about his sekirei, but not enough to be unwilling to sacrifice them for his plan. He's certainly knowledgeable enough to know that he should expect to lose at least a fourth of his forces with as weak of a plan of action as he had. Oh well, at least he got to keep his clone ability a secret, which is certainly more important than keeping the people he'd do anything to protect alive... oh wait.
Considering that things you've told and shown about Naruto so far, you'd think that he isn't the kind of character to make so many rookie mistakes in a row. Combine that with the unwillingness to make any effort into keeping those he cares about safe, and I have to say that Naruto really had to take one for the team (plot) in this one.
Answer: Naruto is an idiot. I'm gonna put this out here right now, before people going on thinking he should be this ultimate, omniscient badass. Naruto has a lot of knowledge locked away in that head, and a good deal of experience, but at his core, Naruto is an idiot. Knowledge means nothing if you don't know how and when to use it. Experience means jack squat when you don't even have your head screwed on straight to put it to use. In case you hadn't noticed, Naruto hasn't exactly been a bastion of levelheadedness and logical thought. Like I said, he's an idiot. It comes with the territory.
Shuredda Sora: looks like Naruto got his comeuppance for being the bitch of his sekirei, and slave to the psychic bond.
He knew that this was a possibility, but enacted the plan anyway, because he's a bitch.
Answer: Says the one who's bitching. I'm not exactly sure why people like you continue to read my story if you don't like it. That being said, I fail to see how Naruto is a bitch. Being someone's bitch implies that they own you and you do whatever you're commanded to do even if it goes against your morals or will result in you getting injured. I would say Naruto is more of a slave to his own conflicted emotions than the Sekirei bond in either event. The bond doesn't make him do anything. It's his own subconscious that does.
Lednacek: arent you a little over-playing the connection loss? many ashikabi loose a sekirei and they dont act like they just had a hearthattack and stroke at the same time.
Answer: No. Unlike every other Ashikabi out there, Naruto knows how to use his chakra, he is intimately connected to it in a way other Ashikabi aren't. That means he feels things, such as his Sekirei, much more clearly. It also makes the bond much deeper, so, when Musubi was offed and her crest disappeared, he could feel it far better than anyone else would have been able to.
5-digits: GAH! You said you wanted to update this story next because it was left on a significant cliffhanger only to give it an even BIGGER one! *insert death wail*
All seriousness though, great fight scenes. It may have ended up in a cliffhanger but it does bring up the 'shit's gonna hit the fan' flag for next chapter. Def kept me at the edge of my seat. Though I am confused, if Naruto didn't want to use his Hiraishin without giving the technique away why didn't he knock them out ad have a shadowclone warp 'em to a preselected location?
Since I am pretty certain what is gonna happen with Musubi next chapter it brings up a question, what do you plan to do with Yume that lies apart from canon if any? Actually we don't know what really happens to her ultimately in canon either so let me rephrase that: do you have any significant plans for Yume in general?
Thanks for the update.
Answer: In the order of questions asked, the answers are 1) Naruto isn't that smart. He's gotten so used to using convoluted plans and scheming that simple ideas like knocking someone out and simply teleporting them is out of the question. It's like how no evil super villain can stop from monologuing. They know it's dumb, but they do it anyway. 2) I plan on diverging from canon with Yume. I don't want to follow the canon, and I won't be for much longer. And yes, I do have significant plans for her. I'm just not saying what they are. Spoilers, you understand.
Seedy-acc: The thing about this story is, about the 1st half of it was pretty amazing, but the fact remains that I could barely remember anything worthnoting in the last...say, 7 chapters. You update maybe one a month(or longer), for chapters w/ this sort of length, it's pretty good. But sometimes nothing, I mean like... nothing, happens in the chapter, except being a commercial for the next one, and the one after, and the one after. It's gotten to the point where I'm only reading simply because this is long enough that I wouldn't really want to drop it.The thing with you moving the story around each fights is that... well it's almost like you're writing it as an anime, not a story/novel, for this chapter. It wasn't bad though.
I don't really know how to explain this, but let's just say that this story was really really solid in the beginning, but now it feels mushy and rushy. Let's not mention that this whole chapter(and the last one) is leading up to an ending that has Naruto going Jubi on everyone's ass and cleaning up the whole city by trashing it, and it's not like I won't like that, it'd simply be very predictable and probably something that every other authors have done before.
When I checked the story alerts and saw this story had an update, I wasn't really... well I was definitely glad it got updated, but I already realized that I'd ve to properly reread the last 2 chapters to simply remember what's happening in the story atm.
Answer: Um, you do realize this is a fanfic based on two anime, right? I'm not writing it as a novel, because its not a novel. If I was writing a novel, I would be getting paid to write, which would make me work a little harder. Since I am not, well, this is just supposed to be something that entertains myself and those who read the story. If it doesn't entertain you, you can always stop reading. I don't wanna force someone to read my work.